Rotten's Book of Poems - *New Poem - 07-10-2008*

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Are These Poems Good Enough To Sell In A Book?

Yes, Everybody should/would buy the Book!!!
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Yes, But I Don't Think Anyone Would Buy...
3
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No, They're not even good enough to post!
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No, But They're not that bad...
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Postby [FnG] SirWaka » Thu Jan 13, 2005 9:02 pm

I WISH people would stop hitting me with FISH.



you can comment on my poem, if not..then not!
That's the way the cookie crumbles,

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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Thu Jan 13, 2005 9:05 pm

Edit: post whiped because of to much overreactiveness by the Emu...

nvr mind this post...
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Postby [FnG] SirWaka » Thu Jan 13, 2005 9:09 pm

ah, but you know that is not true!

your poems are very nice, and about poems of my own,

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check it out,and leave a comment!
placing that WishFish poem has nothing to do with degrading you,
and you know that as much as i!
i even helped you with the spelling! :)
your poems got my repsect, no worries there ya!
t'was just a joke,
so, my apologies if i hurt your feelings with it,
it was not in my intention!

peace out
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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Tue Jan 18, 2005 6:14 pm

A Bell to end Hell

Surrounded by seven hundred people,
Yet we are alone.
Waiting for a bell to ring,
Just like a telephone.
Save us Lord, please save us!
Get us out of here.
If you can’t save us, kill us then.
No one will cry a tear.

The thing that sets us free from hell,
Shuts up just a minute more.
Lord, why don’t you set us free?
What is this torment good for?
Will it make us better people,
In a future we do not see?
Or will it kill our bodies,
So our souls can be set free?

The sound rings through our ears,
That liberating sound.
We hope to escape this hell,
Before our souls are bound.
Bound to the group that leads the way.
Telling us what to think and do.
If we do not escape in time,
You and I will be through.

The wind in our hairs,
It tells us we are free.
We have escaped from hell,
We can be who we want to be.
But tomorrow, yet another day,
We have to return to hell.
And suffer that same doom,
Until the sound of the last bell.

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I hope everybody knows what I am talking about...
for those who don't, it's about school :P

Feedback is still appreceated and encouraged, make me a better poet and you will be rewarded with better poems...

Tell me what you think.
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Postby [FnG] SpannerS » Tue Jan 18, 2005 7:22 pm

wowo and i didnt want to add any coment man u got some real talent i like the bell of hell or some thing like that......


gl with it alll


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Postby [FnG] Lazz » Tue Jan 18, 2005 9:10 pm

Certainly very talented :wink:

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Postby OddJobRob » Tue Jan 18, 2005 11:41 pm

very nice work dude :)
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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Wed Jan 19, 2005 6:43 pm

Envy

I envy the blind for their sight,
They see in the dark what we don’t see in the light.
They look beyond the outer skin,
They see the person that’s buried within.
They are not blinded by how we dress,
I wonder if the blind can see my loneliness.

We normal people aren’t lucky at all.
We do not see beyond the dress up doll.
We are the ones truly blind to it all.

I envy the deaf for what they hear,
They hear the screams of what we fear.
They hear the voices inside our heads,
They hear what we say to our pets.
They are not deafened by all we say,
I wonder if the deaf can hear me pray.

We normal people aren’t lucky at all.
We do not hear beyond that call.
We are the ones truly deaf to it all.

I envy the crippled for they stand tall,
They keep standing where we would fall.
They are stronger then at first would seem,
They do not run around chasing this endless dream.
They do not fall because of all that happened,
I wonder if the crippled could train my legs that slackened.

We normal People aren’t lucky at all.
We do not have the ability to stand up tall.
We are the ones truly crippled after all.

I envy all that are the same as me,
But I wonder, does anyone envy me?

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I am looking for a name for my book of poems and I want you to help me...
Think of a word or small sentence that you think describes me and my poems best... if I have had some good suggestions I will pick one :P:D
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Postby [FnG] SirWaka » Wed Jan 19, 2005 7:04 pm

my inside outward
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Postby [FnG] JinX-D » Wed Jan 19, 2005 7:17 pm

Very good, name for a book... Rotten poems, Stinky poems :D

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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Wed Jan 19, 2005 7:18 pm

-_-'
please try to stay serious... thx in advance...
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Postby [FnG] Lazz » Wed Jan 19, 2005 8:06 pm

Just read through the Envy poem and my only comment is 'wow'.....you have some good stuff there

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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Thu Jan 20, 2005 5:47 pm

I have changed the Poll because I think it is more helpfull to know what Poem is seen as the best then to know what you think off all of them... the first poll didn't really help me... :P:D

please vote again!
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Postby [FnG] Malvos » Thu Jan 20, 2005 6:36 pm

It was a tough call between Envy and Your Eyes In the end I went with Envy, but the best line award goes to the last line of Your Eyes.

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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Fri Jan 21, 2005 7:33 pm

You and me, No more

Is it coincidence that the most important muscle is the one that hurts at times,
when with every beat it pumps love and pain through my veins,
I wanted a poem about the old days, but nothing seems to rhyme.
Your love went away, i went astray, so I'm sitting here at my window with paper in hand,
Trying to write down what I used to feel for you, but the pen seems to resist.
Some weeks back I even believed that no bigger love might exist,
but time has taught me that not all is what it seems.

I put down pen and paper, and walk out on all that reminds me of you,
The room I stand in, the road I take, I don't want to be reminded, what must I do?
I take a turn, my heart seems to burn, the pain is too much,
Reminded of you by all I see, reminded of you by all I touch.

All I wanted was for you to be happy, this pain is so unreal,
And now I hope you feel as rotten as I feel.
My heart turns cold towards you, as I realize.
You have become everything I used to despise.
You were not worth it, how could I be so blind.
I dare not dig any deeper, afraid of what I might find.

The past matters no longer, there only is now,
Get out of my life! I will no longer Bow!
So i let go off the memories, I hope you understand,
Just as I now understand, you and me weren't meant.
I would like to announce that This is the end.

Special thanks to SirWaka, it was a Joint Operation.
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