Rotten's Book of Poems - *New Poem - 07-10-2008*

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Are These Poems Good Enough To Sell In A Book?

Yes, Everybody should/would buy the Book!!!
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Yes, But I Don't Think Anyone Would Buy...
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No, They're not even good enough to post!
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No, But They're not that bad...
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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Sat Jan 22, 2005 4:57 pm

Not better than Me

For years on end you made me believe,
That I wasn’t worth any attention I’d receive.
To bad for you I did not listen,
I wasn’t even considering going into that prison.
The prison you’ve created for me to fill,
Now look at your prison, it is empty still.

You are not better than me,
‘cause I can be whomever I want to be.
You’ve got to stick to the person you created,
You’ve got to be the one you always hated.

You did not win, neither did I,
So with a draw game I say goodbye.
It hurts you more, to know, then me,
That even with a draw game I am free.
Now get out of my life and never return,
I left my past behind, bad memories will burn.

You are not better than me,
‘cause I can be whomever I want to be.
You’ve got to stick to the person you created,
You’ve got to be the one you always hated.

At the last day of your life,
I will visit you and your wife.
I will ask you just one question,
“Did you ever feel sorry for what you’ve done?”
But for an answer I will not wait,
I will leave you alone to end the life you hate.

You’ve realized that you’re not better than me.
Now you know I can be who I want to be,
And realize that you’ve got to stick to what you hate,
I hope you’ll damn god for your cruel fate.
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Postby [FnG] SirWaka » Sun Jan 23, 2005 3:37 am

not better thAn me ;)
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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Sun Jan 23, 2005 7:48 pm

Shadows

The darkness falls on the world,
As clouds fill the sky.
Just as my life, it darkens now,
The light was taken by a lie.

I thought I knew the shadows,
And all the secrets that they held.
Now I know that no one knows,
The secrets that the shadows hold.

To the shadows everybody talks,
Tell all their secrets to the nothing.
They trust the shadow with their secrets,
‘cause the shadows won’t tell a thing.

I wish I was more like the shadows,
Be trusted by all who walk by.
Then I would be the one that knows,
The secrets that make the shadows dark.

But who then would be the light,
The light that takes away the secrets.
I don’t know anyone who can,
Expose the secrets we tell from our beds.
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yesterday eve I sat in the car to the city of Groningen and as I looked outside I noticed that due to the clouds there where no stars, this is not a special sight but it inspired me to write this, it ended a whole lot different then I first meant it but I still like it.

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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Wed Feb 09, 2005 12:15 am

Race Me

What a Disgrace
We're running a race,
to where no one knows,
still everyone goes.
Constantly Provong,
your skill at this one thing.
I'm the best at this,
Yeah you wish.

Out of the Shadow,
for once in the spot,
just to say hello,
and be what I'm not.

But why am I not,
blessed like a lot,
of the people in here.
It's not the defeat I fear,
but for once let me be,
the winner you see.
Not put away in the dark,
but clear, a landmark.

Out of the Shadow,
For once in the spot,
just to say hello,
and be what I'm not.

Let me be a winner,
for these thoughts I am a sinner,
Eraser of believes,
I helped release.
The winner takes all,
but again I must fall,
trip in this race,
what a disgrace
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Postby [FnG] DarK ChilD » Thu Feb 10, 2005 11:43 pm

u have a real talent man

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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Tue Mar 01, 2005 10:32 am

Give me, Free me
Give me control,
Make me a god.
Give me the power,
To make everyone nod.
Give me the fame,
I deserved for so long.
Give me the proof,
To proof you all wrong.

Don’t give me that S***,
About how righteous you are.
Don’t give me that talk,
About that girl in the bar.
Don’t give me your orders,
I won’t do what you ask.
Don’t give me a role,
I won’t wear any mask.

Free me of this,
That’s all I ask for.
Free me of pain,
That will make me hardcore.
Free me of thoughts,
That bring me closer to “them”.
Free me of all,
Whom I condemn.
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Postby [FnG] Rambo » Fri Mar 04, 2005 12:17 am

Emu, you ever thought about making a book of these poems and trying to earn some money?
"I'll be there in a minute, I'm just killing soulkiss..." - Rambo
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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Fri Mar 04, 2005 8:16 am

[FnG] Rambo wrote:Emu, you ever thought about making a book of these poems and trying to earn some money?


I am afraid that it won't make me any money, I mean the poems aren't really good enough to actually sell...
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Postby [FnG] Rambo » Fri Mar 04, 2005 10:03 am

[FnG] Rotten_Emu wrote:
[FnG] Rambo wrote:Emu, you ever thought about making a book of these poems and trying to earn some money?


I am afraid that it won't make me any money, I mean the poems aren't really good enough to actually sell...


A poem is a poem. They're not good or bad! Poems are an emotional way of talking from your heart (sounds cheesy :lol:) and if you manage to touch the readers feelings, then it's a success!! :D
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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Fri Mar 04, 2005 3:52 pm

[FnG] Rambo wrote:
[FnG] Rotten_Emu wrote:
[FnG] Rambo wrote:Emu, you ever thought about making a book of these poems and trying to earn some money?


I am afraid that it won't make me any money, I mean the poems aren't really good enough to actually sell...


A poem is a poem. They're not good or bad! Poems are an emotional way of talking from your heart (sounds cheesy :lol:) and if you manage to touch the readers feelings, then it's a success!! :D


But Then I Wonder, do I tough the readers feelings? I don't know, it's very liberating but I don't know if anyone feels the same ad thus likes the poems... yes you say they're good and well written but are they emotionally good enough?
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Postby [FnG] BottyZ » Sat Mar 05, 2005 8:55 pm

Well done emu, excellent poems :-P
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Cool!

Postby tormentor_darknight » Sun Mar 06, 2005 3:40 pm

Hey, i like it. Is William Shakespere ur relative? friend?
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Postby [FnG] JJ [NL] » Mon Mar 07, 2005 12:52 am

Dude, you really have got talent... but I would advise you (a wannabe poet myself) to keep away from the simple rhyme a bit more... (in dutch, to make it clearer: soms lijkt het een beetje sinterklaasachtig)...
You have a talent for saying the things you want to say in eloquent ways, but too much of the all/small type of rhyme hurts the "deeper meaning" of your poems by creating an "easy" image(in dutch: wekt de indruk van rijmelarij, terwijl het wel degelijk poezie zou kunnen zijn/is)... Don't get me wrong here, I think your poems are really creative and it's great you are able to express yourself in this way, just a piece of advice.....

Edit: just keep doing what you're doing and you'll be fine :) I really admire your bravery, putting these windows to your heart out here, and I think you're definitely a poet with potential.... but, to be perfectly honest, sending them to a publisher might be a bit too much too soon, but they may be able to offer you advice.....
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Postby [FnG] pyxie.T32 » Fri Mar 11, 2005 1:59 am

I am genuinly sorry I ahv not posted before now, you clearly have tallent and a eloquent grasp of language and understanding of rhyme scheme etc. like what you have done, I think it is quite strong in a simple way, not over the top or self centered like the victorian poets (Robert Browning or ALfred Lord Tenyson) closer to the WW1 poets like Wilfred Owen or Sasson, not over laboured just well written and to the point, as a sugestion I would say look at John Keats and Lord Byron, both of whom wrote very well.
keep it up, nice work, poetry takes time, however good you are now remember your skills will have doubled by the time you are 30 if you keep on at it.
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Postby [FnG] Rotten_Emu » Wed Mar 16, 2005 11:48 pm

A Fond Farewell

To those who want to listen,
To those who want to see,
I will show and tell them all,
What you mean for me.
I will tell all the stories,
Where you were there for me.

Always there to keep me real,.
Grab me by the shoulders
And shake me awake, so I can feel,
The love you give and take.
Why do I write this? What’s the deal?
I hear you ask, well here’s the answer.

Words cannot describe my gratitude,
There are not enough flowers to thank you,
But with this I wish you fond farewell,
For all the happiness and luck with all you do,
Always on my mind, always in my heart,
It’s not fun but our roads must part.
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